- I believe the strengths of my essay are the small counterarguments I included. I also provided a lot of strong claims and facts to back up those claims. My voice is present and strong throughout the paper. One of my stronger paragraphs is the paragraph where I share my view as a non-athlete college student. I share how I feel about the whole argument as a regular student who doesn’t get recognized for my hard work, which I think makes a strong point.
- My essays have improved over the semester by my revising process. My revising process has improved tremendously over the semester. I never used to edit my papers and essays how I edit them now. My revising process has grown so much that I believe I am a better writer.
- “Gene Smith, the athlete director at Ohio State University, has said that if the NCAA pay ceiling were lifted and he were pushed to pay basketball and football student-athletes more than their full-ride scholarship packages, he would not expect to maintain the same number of sports” (McDavis 2). This quote and how it is framed works very well in my paper. I introduced it by using a counter argument and the quote is just the facts that back up my argument. I then explained how some schools can’t afford such compensation for student athletes and some schools may be considering cutting sports program altogether. I then explained how I felt about that and explained why I see it as wrong and unfair.
- My revision process consists of going through all my peer edits and editing whatever it is I was told to edit, including my professor’s edits. Then, I will read my paper aloud again and again until I can read it without making any revisions to it as I read it. This includes global and local revision processes. Once, I can read through it completely twice without making any edits, I am finished.
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