For this Learning Outcome I have chosen to share the revisions between the rough draft (attached images) and final draft of Paper #2 from ENG110. When I wrote my rough draft, I just sat there typing anything and everything that I could think of, which actually came out pretty good. I was pretty proud of my rough draft results. The only problem was, the personal story part of my personal essay was so good and strong that it made the other parts of my essay seem dull. My intro, more specifically, was probably the weakest and worst part of my essay. Introductions and conclusions are always an issue for me. Every time I write an introduction, I write it as fast as I can because I know it’s no good and I know that the body parts of any essay are the parts where I can really get my thoughts and claims out, which is probably my biggest weakness in writing. But, it also depends on what I am writing. When I am writing a creative writing piece, my introductions are usually pretty good.

My revision process is a pretty solid regime. I usually start my gathering any outside edits that were made on my paper, such as peer reviews or any edits or comments my professor had made on my first draft. Once I have what I need around me, I will read my essay once through without touching it at all. Then, I will go through it again and edit what I think should be edited, locally and globally. Once I am done making any edits that I see fit, I’ll then go through the outside edits and make those changes if I see them fit, which most of the time I do. After I finish all the editing from outside reviews, I read my paper aloud continuously until I can read through the entire thing without feeling the absolute need to make any edits. Finally, I call it a day and my final draft is finished.